I'm so happy to see the story isn't abandoned i can see it easily being one of my favorites. The writing is simply beautiful honestly. It is so easy to get lost in the short demo that it's scary. Looking very much forward to seeing a future update. Really well done.
I just came across your story and I think its fantastic. Your writing is very captivating and even though the demo was short, it was very well written and I'm already itching for more. Looking forward to more updates👍
Is this story still in development or is it an abandoned game? The concept is so cool and I'm already in love with both of the characters from that one short demo! Loved the writing style and I really hope there are more chapters to come...
Hello! The story is very much not abandoned, I had to stop writing for life/work reasons but hopefully I will now be able to finish the next update :D Glad you enjoyed the demo, thanks for reading!! xx
I found the demo very intriguing and I adore your writing style! This is the retelling I didn't know I needed. Also, Odile with xe/xyr pronouns is genius and I love xyr personality already
Fingers crossed that you're able to continue working on this bc I am invested :))
Hi! I've been visiting this IF very often, and by the way I love everything about it already! I wanted to know if you have a planed date for the next release? (Sorry for bothering you)
Hi there!! That's very kind of you, thank you for reading and I'm glad you like the demo so far <3 My initial plan was for an update to be posted this month but unfortunately my new job is extremely time-consuming. That, and my laptop broke- I tried to earn enough commission money to replace it before June started but couldn't, and I'm have a lot of trouble typing on my phone so I've written next to nothing for the whole month of May. I'm hoping I'll get to have the update ready by the end of the summer, but I can't give a specific date for the release, sorry!
It's alright! Things happen! I do hope things get better though, May and June didn't seem to help you much. Also take care of yourself. The story is amazing, but for it to continue it needs a healthy author too. (Thank you for answering my question.)
This is so lovely! As a child I loved the swan princess fairy-tale and ahhhh I'm so happy there's an IF-esque rendition that exists. (And the writing is very good, so I'm going to be eagerly waiting for more :D)
The writing is so lovely, and the premise is so interesting!!! The demo as it is right now is quite short but I'm already enamoured! I'm very excited to see how the story goes, I'm looking forward to the next update! <3
Pretty much, yeah :) 'dark hair' is a vague descriptor which you can interpret as you'd like, I imagine it as almost black with a warm undertone but it won't be specified; 'brown hair' is pretty self-explanatory heh
Swan Song is not only my favorite ballet, is one of the few pieces of media that make me go insane in any adaptation it gets, and you, lovely author, just made something amazing right here.
I can't wait for the demo to be maybe longer or the full story as I'll probably read it a hundred thousand times, I already love how you managed the customization and, god, I just...
You took something I have loved since my childhood and made it a whole new thing I will totally love even more.
Also you can tell I was emotional as I put Swan Song because I never remember the name of the ballet in english haha...anyway, yes, I was talking about Swan Lake (Curse my inhability to remember names and that I only call that in Spanish)
This comment genuinely made me smile so much!!!! I too hold Swan Lake very close to my heart ever since childhood, and as 'unpractised' I might be at actually writing a whole story I'm definitely putting a lot of love into this project, so thank you for taking the time to leave this comment-- it means a lot! Have a great day xx
Hello, yes the only public content available at the moment is the demo you find here! There are some extra drabbles on tumblr that won't appear in the story, and chapter 1 is currently being written. Thank you for reading x
An amazing demo I have found again! I really like that you added the little [MC] around the text where we are supposed to make our own character :D It really helps and I can't wait for the next update!
I'm happy to hear you found the demo again, thank you for reading!!! Ahh yes, it was pointed out that some choices tend to get lost in text or can be misleading, so I thought adding descriptors on the most relevant ones might be a good solution! Glad it helps :D
Another very short and good demo I found. I really like how detailed it is, from MC's personality to each expression/personality of each characters. The artwork is pretty too, can't wait for the next update to come out :D
Very promising! I can't wait to see where the story will go. It's amazing how much you were able to tell in just a few chapters and the character's relationships with each other and their current personalities...
You're very kind, thank you! It's very satisfying to hear, I really hope you'll enjoy the future updates as well!! Thank you for taking the time to comment xx
I can't wait for more of the story. As a child, The Swan Princess was my favorite, and to be able to play an IF based on the story has me overjoyed. Can't wait for more!
Dang, thanks for tearing my heart in two xD I can't wait for more!
Even though it was short, I'm already in love with the story and the characters! They are very well written, and I sure hope there'd be lots more interactions with them!
Ah, I didn't realize the demo dropped! I thought it would be longer till then! Such a nice surprise, especially since I've been upset after another game, today! <3
You wouldn't believe how excited I was for this, and man, it didn't disappoint! I adore both Leir and Odile, and seeing them both in the actual story, not only tumblr asks was such a delight. And well, to finally truly connect with my MC too!
I filled a bug report form too - didn't notice bugs per se, but answering what you've been asking on tumblr, and reporting something that bothered me with the MC's name selection. As I'm sure you'll recognize my report with that, feel free to comment on it here if you wish to answer to what I said! I don't mind!
One thing I didn't actually put in my form, but still thought about while reading is the eye color selection. The blue eyes are described as "as blue and fierce as the winter sea", but the "fierce" part is a bit strange considering my MC is kind and soft (he has blue eyes, so I had to pick that). I know we get to decide the MC's personality after that, but it's not really the issue - it's just that having the eyes described as fierce kind of sounds as if the MC's gaze was fierce, and well, it's the opposite for me! But I don't really categorize that as an "issue" per se, hence me talking about it here only!
That aside, small question!
Some Tumblr posts mentionned shifting, and how it's awful and so on, and it seems it's something that people have seen in the demo? But it didn't happen in my playthrough, so I'm curious...
And I think that's it!
Thank you for uploading the demo and the awesome start - this was probably the IF I was the most eager for!
PS: I have noticed on Tumblr you're not a fan of code diving because of the spoilers, but generally neutral. I always code dive when I play IF games because I love seeing how the game is made, the effects of the choices and to see outcomes I could NEVER go for while playing (like the bad endings and stuff) - the experience is only half as fun without it to me! But I only read the parts I can access in game, unless I'm actually testing the game and was explicitly asked to read more, so no worries about that!
Hello, I'm glad you're enjoying the characters and the game so far! And yes, the demo was initially planned for 2022 because I wanted to post prelude + first act all at once, but i thought a sneak peek would be fun for everyone and good for me to correct a few things!
Anyways, re: your feedback about name selection – I saw it in the form, yes; I don't think I'm going to change that, because frankly it sounds more like a personal preference; name selection is something that can hardly be done without somehow interrupting the narration, and I don't really see a difference between 1 visible name via cycle or 6 name options all listed! I prefer the former to the latter because that passage is long enough and listing out all the possile preset names would only make it longer. At the end of the day it's never believable to have a character get their own name wrong, and I think with certain choices needed in IF one just needs to use a bit of imagination ;)
As for the bit about the eye colour descriptor, I get what you're saying; however, in that instance the mc is being described from Leir's perspective, and they're being described as Leir remembers them/perceived them in the past. The description of the mc's eye colour doesn't really touch the mc's attitude/personality: one can be soft and kind and still have a very intense gaze due to how they look! That, and add the fact that when the mc was younger they were still a noble who had lived a very sheltered life; they might not have acted like a spoiled brat but I don't think it would be out of place to see a certain fierceness in them just tied to their upbringing (but that's just my way of seeing it). In any case, the eye descriptor only serves the purpose of making the prose richer during the customization so i wouldn't worry about fierceness becoming a recurring theme just because you chose blue eyes for your mc ahah
To get the bit about the shifting you have to go down the antagonistic path for Odile (aka choosing the meanest option you see lol); you don't see the mc shift or anything like it, it's just a line in the dialogue that mentions it-- the imagery is a bit violent so proceed with caution!!
Hope I helped clear things a bit! Thanks for reading xx
No problem about the things I put in the form - after all, it's up to you!
And gotcha for the shifting! I was a bit confused! I won't go that path cause I couldn't bring myself to it, but I was just confused, so that's okay, I basically wanted to know where that is more than anything!
The shifting is really only mentioned in passing, you'll get to find out more about it in future updates for sure so do not worry about that ;D And no problem! Thank you for reading and I appreciate the feeback regardless of final decisions! xx
This is amazing! I already like all characters so much!!
Soooo I've been in love with Swan Lake and The Swan Princess since childhood. And now you give us the chance to reshape this wonderful story with our own very special MC, that's so fantastic omg. Thank you!!!
I can't wait for the next part! Already know this is gonna be a favorite of mine. 😆 It's so well written and I love the beginning where we read a LI's pov, made me feel for them so much. 😩
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I'm so happy to see the story isn't abandoned i can see it easily being one of my favorites. The writing is simply beautiful honestly. It is so easy to get lost in the short demo that it's scary. Looking very much forward to seeing a future update. Really well done.
I just came across your story and I think its fantastic. Your writing is very captivating and even though the demo was short, it was very well written and I'm already itching for more. Looking forward to more updates👍
Is this story still in development or is it an abandoned game? The concept is so cool and I'm already in love with both of the characters from that one short demo! Loved the writing style and I really hope there are more chapters to come...
Hello! The story is very much not abandoned, I had to stop writing for life/work reasons but hopefully I will now be able to finish the next update :D Glad you enjoyed the demo, thanks for reading!! xx
Oh! I hope everything is alright, don’t rush!! And it’s reassuring to know that it’s still in development, I’m in love with this idea already <3
I've come back to this close to a year since it's was published still as great as I remember I hope a chapter gets released eventually
it was amazing! (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡
Tchaikovsky's music for Swan Lake is in the public domain and would add to Swan Song if you incorporated it into the game.
NOOOO don't let it end thereee! Suchh an interesting concept and I really do hope you continue this, love the characters already!
I found the demo very intriguing and I adore your writing style! This is the retelling I didn't know I needed. Also, Odile with xe/xyr pronouns is genius and I love xyr personality already
Fingers crossed that you're able to continue working on this bc I am invested :))
how much do you need for a laptop?
Hi! I've been visiting this IF very often, and by the way I love everything about it already! I wanted to know if you have a planed date for the next release? (Sorry for bothering you)
Hi there!! That's very kind of you, thank you for reading and I'm glad you like the demo so far <3 My initial plan was for an update to be posted this month but unfortunately my new job is extremely time-consuming. That, and my laptop broke- I tried to earn enough commission money to replace it before June started but couldn't, and I'm have a lot of trouble typing on my phone so I've written next to nothing for the whole month of May. I'm hoping I'll get to have the update ready by the end of the summer, but I can't give a specific date for the release, sorry!
It's alright! Things happen! I do hope things get better though, May and June didn't seem to help you much. Also take care of yourself. The story is amazing, but for it to continue it needs a healthy author too. (Thank you for answering my question.)
I cant wait to read more of this its too addicting aaAAAAAAAAaaaa, also the art of the characters is beautiful!!!!
So happy to hear that honestly, thanks for reading and I'm very glad you're enjoying the story so far!
This is so lovely! As a child I loved the swan princess fairy-tale and ahhhh I'm so happy there's an IF-esque rendition that exists.
(And the writing is very good, so I'm going to be eagerly waiting for more :D)
<3 Thank you for reading!!!!
Great so far! Kinda bored in the beginning and a tiny bit mixed up but I figured it out! :
Ahh, I'm sorry if you felt like the demo was boring or confusing! Happy you ended up enjoying it anyways though, thanks for reading :D
It's okay lmao! It's probably just me because I don't really process things that quick.
The writing is so lovely, and the premise is so interesting!!! The demo as it is right now is quite short but I'm already enamoured! I'm very excited to see how the story goes, I'm looking forward to the next update! <3
Thank you for reading and for the lovely compliments, so glad you enjoyed the demo so far!! xx
I love this! Such good writing <3
Thank you so much for reading!! xx
How can I download，Can I still play?( •̀∀•́ )
Download isn't required, you can play in your browser by clicking on "Run story"!
"Dark hair" option means dark brown hair and "brown hair" means light brown hair?
Pretty much, yeah :) 'dark hair' is a vague descriptor which you can interpret as you'd like, I imagine it as almost black with a warm undertone but it won't be specified; 'brown hair' is pretty self-explanatory heh
the ui looks rlly nice and the writing was rlly good!!
Thank you so much!! Happy you liked the story xx
Good lord.
Swan Song is not only my favorite ballet, is one of the few pieces of media that make me go insane in any adaptation it gets, and you, lovely author, just made something amazing right here.
I can't wait for the demo to be maybe longer or the full story as I'll probably read it a hundred thousand times, I already love how you managed the customization and, god, I just...
You took something I have loved since my childhood and made it a whole new thing I will totally love even more.
Also you can tell I was emotional as I put Swan Song because I never remember the name of the ballet in english haha...anyway, yes, I was talking about Swan Lake (Curse my inhability to remember names and that I only call that in Spanish)
This comment genuinely made me smile so much!!!! I too hold Swan Lake very close to my heart ever since childhood, and as 'unpractised' I might be at actually writing a whole story I'm definitely putting a lot of love into this project, so thank you for taking the time to leave this comment-- it means a lot! Have a great day xx
Is only the demo available?, because I would love to be able to read more chapters of the story :)
Hello, yes the only public content available at the moment is the demo you find here! There are some extra drabbles on tumblr that won't appear in the story, and chapter 1 is currently being written. Thank you for reading x
An amazing demo I have found again! I really like that you added the little [MC] around the text where we are supposed to make our own character :D It really helps and I can't wait for the next update!
I'm happy to hear you found the demo again, thank you for reading!!! Ahh yes, it was pointed out that some choices tend to get lost in text or can be misleading, so I thought adding descriptors on the most relevant ones might be a good solution! Glad it helps :D
Another very short and good demo I found. I really like how detailed it is, from MC's personality to each expression/personality of each characters. The artwork is pretty too, can't wait for the next update to come out :D
Thanks for reading!! I'm happy you enjoyed the MC/game mechanics so far!! Cannot wait to share the update with everyone xx
this is so good! i love your writing style and i'm so excited to see where this goes <33
!! thank you so much, it means a lot!! have a great day <3
I'm so glad I decided to follow you and this popped up on my feed. I cant wait to see how this shapes up, you're an amazing writer(coder too) <3
Ahh thank you so much, how nice of you!! I'm happy you found the story, hope you'll enjoy the rest, too! xxx
Very promising! I can't wait to see where the story will go. It's amazing how much you were able to tell in just a few chapters and the character's relationships with each other and their current personalities...
It's all shaping to look like a very good story.
You're very kind, thank you! It's very satisfying to hear, I really hope you'll enjoy the future updates as well!! Thank you for taking the time to comment xx
I can't wait for more of the story. As a child, The Swan Princess was my favorite, and to be able to play an IF based on the story has me overjoyed. Can't wait for more!
Thank you so much for reading!! Looks like we shared the same passion as kids haha I've always loved the story! glad you enjoyed xx
Absolutely enamored with this story! Like holy shit, I wasn't expecting to be so into it. Can't wait for more!!
ahh that makes me very happy, you're very kind thank you!! hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story <33
I love it <33, I hope you will continue this story there's a lot of potential in this story good job!
thank you! currently working on the first chapter, your support means a lot!! xx
akdlaklahfal TOO SHORT
Dang, thanks for tearing my heart in two xD I can't wait for more!
Even though it was short, I'm already in love with the story and the characters! They are very well written, and I sure hope there'd be lots more interactions with them!
Very happy to hear you've enjoyed the demo, hope you'll like the rest of the story as well! Thanks for reading xx
i'm in love!! :D
Thank you for reading! xx
This is so lovely! It filled me with joy being able to choose the pronouns for each of the characters. :D
Thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it!! xx
Ah, so tremendously beautiful writings! I reread almost every sentence.
I am fond of LI's POV's! Really gives another angle of the story.
Story and characters are well-plotted and deep, I like the course of it all.
I am already in love with this story, thank you.
Thank you so much for your kind words, this comment genuinely made me so happy (and even more excited to write the next chapter)!
Hope you will enjoy the rest of the story, have a great day xxx
Ah, I didn't realize the demo dropped! I thought it would be longer till then! Such a nice surprise, especially since I've been upset after another game, today! <3
You wouldn't believe how excited I was for this, and man, it didn't disappoint! I adore both Leir and Odile, and seeing them both in the actual story, not only tumblr asks was such a delight. And well, to finally truly connect with my MC too!
I filled a bug report form too - didn't notice bugs per se, but answering what you've been asking on tumblr, and reporting something that bothered me with the MC's name selection. As I'm sure you'll recognize my report with that, feel free to comment on it here if you wish to answer to what I said! I don't mind!
One thing I didn't actually put in my form, but still thought about while reading is the eye color selection. The blue eyes are described as "as blue and fierce as the winter sea", but the "fierce" part is a bit strange considering my MC is kind and soft (he has blue eyes, so I had to pick that). I know we get to decide the MC's personality after that, but it's not really the issue - it's just that having the eyes described as fierce kind of sounds as if the MC's gaze was fierce, and well, it's the opposite for me! But I don't really categorize that as an "issue" per se, hence me talking about it here only!
That aside, small question!
Some Tumblr posts mentionned shifting, and how it's awful and so on, and it seems it's something that people have seen in the demo? But it didn't happen in my playthrough, so I'm curious...
And I think that's it!
Thank you for uploading the demo and the awesome start - this was probably the IF I was the most eager for!
PS: I have noticed on Tumblr you're not a fan of code diving because of the spoilers, but generally neutral. I always code dive when I play IF games because I love seeing how the game is made, the effects of the choices and to see outcomes I could NEVER go for while playing (like the bad endings and stuff) - the experience is only half as fun without it to me! But I only read the parts I can access in game, unless I'm actually testing the game and was explicitly asked to read more, so no worries about that!
Hello, I'm glad you're enjoying the characters and the game so far! And yes, the demo was initially planned for 2022 because I wanted to post prelude + first act all at once, but i thought a sneak peek would be fun for everyone and good for me to correct a few things!
Anyways, re: your feedback about name selection – I saw it in the form, yes; I don't think I'm going to change that, because frankly it sounds more like a personal preference; name selection is something that can hardly be done without somehow interrupting the narration, and I don't really see a difference between 1 visible name via cycle or 6 name options all listed! I prefer the former to the latter because that passage is long enough and listing out all the possile preset names would only make it longer. At the end of the day it's never believable to have a character get their own name wrong, and I think with certain choices needed in IF one just needs to use a bit of imagination ;)
As for the bit about the eye colour descriptor, I get what you're saying; however, in that instance the mc is being described from Leir's perspective, and they're being described as Leir remembers them/perceived them in the past. The description of the mc's eye colour doesn't really touch the mc's attitude/personality: one can be soft and kind and still have a very intense gaze due to how they look! That, and add the fact that when the mc was younger they were still a noble who had lived a very sheltered life; they might not have acted like a spoiled brat but I don't think it would be out of place to see a certain fierceness in them just tied to their upbringing (but that's just my way of seeing it). In any case, the eye descriptor only serves the purpose of making the prose richer during the customization so i wouldn't worry about fierceness becoming a recurring theme just because you chose blue eyes for your mc ahah
To get the bit about the shifting you have to go down the antagonistic path for Odile (aka choosing the meanest option you see lol); you don't see the mc shift or anything like it, it's just a line in the dialogue that mentions it-- the imagery is a bit violent so proceed with caution!!
Hope I helped clear things a bit! Thanks for reading xx
Ah, I see! Thanks!
No problem about the things I put in the form - after all, it's up to you!
And gotcha for the shifting! I was a bit confused! I won't go that path cause I couldn't bring myself to it, but I was just confused, so that's okay, I basically wanted to know where that is more than anything!
Anyway, thanks for your answers! <3
The shifting is really only mentioned in passing, you'll get to find out more about it in future updates for sure so do not worry about that ;D And no problem! Thank you for reading and I appreciate the feeback regardless of final decisions! xx
This is amazing! I already like all characters so much!!
Soooo I've been in love with Swan Lake and The Swan Princess since childhood. And now you give us the chance to reshape this wonderful story with our own very special MC, that's so fantastic omg. Thank you!!!
You're very welcome, thank you for reading!! xx
This is amazing I can't wait until the next part.
Thank you, glad you enjoyed!
I can't wait for the next part! Already know this is gonna be a favorite of mine. 😆 It's so well written and I love the beginning where we read a LI's pov, made me feel for them so much. 😩
You're too kind, thanks so much!! I love writing from the LI's perspective so you can definitely expect more of that :D
It's kind remind me to lana del rey song.. It's very nice and warm feeling.. Can't wait to see more!
Such a great compliment, thank you for reading! xx
Another gem?! I'm so excited for this game it really has potential! I can't wait for the next chapter
Thank you for reading, glad you're enjoying the story so far! xx
wow this is fantastically written and i absolutely loved reading it!!! i'm really eager to read the rest already
Thank you, you're too kind! Hope you'll like future updates as well! <3